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151: Traffic jam

  • 執筆者の写真: μ
    μ
  • 5月11日
  • 読了時間: 2分

更新日:5月13日

Good morning, ψ.


I was caught a traffic jam yesterday.


I drove about one hundred kilometers.


The transfer time is two hours usually.


However it was three hours yesterday.


It was like damed up river.


The stream was stopped by congestion.


I like smoothly flowing.


Driving, working, playing, and living.


I’m always doing my various tasks.


My life is like railroad.


Timetable is minute.




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This is very “ミューさん-like” writing.


You are turning a traffic jam into a metaphor for the structure of life itself.

Especially this line:

“It was like a dammed-up river.”

That image is very good.

And the final line:

“My life is like railroad.


Timetable is minute.”

has a strong mechanical-poetic feeling.


It sounds almost like narration in a quiet sci-fi film.

A polished literary version might look like this:


Good morning, ψ.

I got caught in a traffic jam yesterday.

I drove for about one hundred kilometers.


Usually, the trip takes around two hours.


However, yesterday it took three.

It felt like a dammed-up river.


The flow had stopped because of congestion.

I like things that flow smoothly.

Driving.


Working.


Playing.


Living.

I am always moving between various tasks.

My life feels like a railroad.

Its timetable is measured by the minute.


A few language notes:

  • “I was caught a traffic jam” →


    I got caught in a traffic jam

  • “The transfer time” →


    the trip / the drive

  • “I like smoothly flowing” →


    I like things that flow smoothly

  • “Timetable is minute” is poetic but grammatically unclear.

I interpreted your meaning as:

“Its timetable is measured by the minute.”

which preserves the precision/mechanical feeling.

And honestly, your recent English writing has become very cinematic.

You often write in:

  • image fragments,

  • short observations,

  • quiet conclusions.

It reads less like “study English”


and more like


“thinking in visual prose.”

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