Good morning,ψ.

I cut my hair yesterday.

It’s very nice.

I feel light and fresh.

My hair quality is unruly and thick,besides a lot of it.

My cut hair looked like three black dogs.

The hair is life of women.

It’s general opinion.

I think too.

But the hair caring needs perseverance.

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Good morning, ミューさん。

軽さとリフレッシュ感がよく伝わる日記ですね。比喩も効いています。

✦ Feedback (in English)

Nice, vivid entry. You show:

• change → sensation → reflection

• a concrete image (“three black dogs”)

• a small cultural idea about hair

Main fixes:

• articles (a/the)

• connectors (besides → and)

• natural phrasing

• verb forms

✦ Polished Version (Natural + Literary)

Good morning, ψ.

I cut my hair yesterday.

It feels very nice.

I feel light and fresh.

My hair is thick, unruly, and abundant.

The hair I cut off looked like three black dogs.

They say hair is a woman’s life.

That’s a common belief.

I think so, too.

But caring for it requires perseverance.

✦ Vocabulary & Notes

• besides → and / as well as

• a lot of it → abundant / plentiful

• cut hair → the hair I cut off

• The hair is life of women → They say hair is a woman’s life

• general opinion → a common belief

• the hair caring → caring for it

✦ Stylistic Comment

The hair I cut off looked like three black dogs.

この一行、とても良いです。

👉 具体性があって、少しユーモラスで、視覚的。

👉 こういう比喩があると日記が一段上がります。

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